Comments on: Friday Flash: The Age Of Aquarius http://www.velcro-city.co.uk/friday-flash-the-age-of-aquarius/ Science fiction, science fact, and all that's in between ... Mon, 14 Nov 2011 02:49:46 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.2.1 By: Sterling Camden http://www.velcro-city.co.uk/friday-flash-the-age-of-aquarius/comment-page-1/#comment-119373 Sterling Camden Wed, 05 Sep 2007 01:04:23 +0000 http://www.velcro-city.co.uk/friday-flash-the-age-of-aquarius/#comment-119373 Very good, Paul -- I'd be interested to read more. One suggestion: I experienced momentary confusion between the nomad and the herder in the first sentence (reading too quickly, I guess). Adding one adjective to either personage might have rhythmically separated the nouns enough to keep me from making that mistake. Very good, Paul — I’d be interested to read more.

One suggestion: I experienced momentary confusion between the nomad and the herder in the first sentence (reading too quickly, I guess). Adding one adjective to either personage might have rhythmically separated the nouns enough to keep me from making that mistake.

]]> By: » You can count on me for nothing Nostalgia For Infinity: Literature, Gaming, Punk Rock (and all that) http://www.velcro-city.co.uk/friday-flash-the-age-of-aquarius/comment-page-1/#comment-118250 » You can count on me for nothing Nostalgia For Infinity: Literature, Gaming, Punk Rock (and all that) Sun, 02 Sep 2007 15:52:40 +0000 http://www.velcro-city.co.uk/friday-flash-the-age-of-aquarius/#comment-118250 [...] Paul Raven: ‘The Age of Aquarius’ [...] [...] Paul Raven: ‘The Age of Aquarius’ [...]

]]> By: GLP http://www.velcro-city.co.uk/friday-flash-the-age-of-aquarius/comment-page-1/#comment-117405 GLP Fri, 31 Aug 2007 22:20:15 +0000 http://www.velcro-city.co.uk/friday-flash-the-age-of-aquarius/#comment-117405 Yes, you most definitely should. Yes, you most definitely should.

]]> By: Paul Raven http://www.velcro-city.co.uk/friday-flash-the-age-of-aquarius/comment-page-1/#comment-117209 Paul Raven Fri, 31 Aug 2007 12:56:12 +0000 http://www.velcro-city.co.uk/friday-flash-the-age-of-aquarius/#comment-117209 This is the problem I have with writing flash - the story ends up too big for the format. I can't seem to break things down into a single coherent stand-alone nugget. I guess I should take Jetse's advice, and start working on longer pieces ... This is the problem I have with writing flash – the story ends up too big for the format. I can’t seem to break things down into a single coherent stand-alone nugget. I guess I should take Jetse’s advice, and start working on longer pieces …

]]> By: GLP http://www.velcro-city.co.uk/friday-flash-the-age-of-aquarius/comment-page-1/#comment-117208 GLP Fri, 31 Aug 2007 12:48:51 +0000 http://www.velcro-city.co.uk/friday-flash-the-age-of-aquarius/#comment-117208 I'd like to hear a bit more about the back story - where's this nomad going in his sand tank? Is there a war going on? It's all very intriguing... I’d like to hear a bit more about the back story – where’s this nomad going in his sand tank? Is there a war going on? It’s all very intriguing…

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